Loose sentence

Construction

It adds modifying elements after the subject, complement, and verb.

Effect

Loose sentences may make a work seem informal, relaxed, and conversational. However, according to Strunk and White's The Elements of Style (2000), a succession of loose sentences, especially those of two clauses, is to be avoided because of "mechanical symmetry and sing-song". | access-date = 2016-02-29 | archive-url = https://web.archive.org/web/20160306094427/http://www.tulane.edu/~umar365/readings/elements6.htm | archive-date = 2016-03-06 | url-status = dead

Examples

• "Bells rang, filling the air with their clangor, startling pigeons into flight from every belfry, bringing people into the streets to hear the news." (From the English Reviewer)
• She drove her car to go to the movies, and she got gas.
• "I have been assured by a very knowing American friend of my acquaintance in London, that a young healthy child well nourished is at a year old a most delicious, nourishing, and wholesome food, whether stewed, roasted, baked or boiled; and I make no doubt it will equally serve in a fricassee or a ragout." Jonathan Swift, A Modest Proposal

Alternatives

Stunk and White, in The Elements of Style believe one should recast enough of them to remove the monotony, replacing them by simple sentences, by sentences of two clauses joined by a semicolon, by periodic sentences of two clauses, by sentences, loose or periodic, of three clauses—whichever best represent the real relations of the thought.

For example, if the writer wanted to rewrite the above examples, he could write:

• Bells rang. Their resonance filled the air with clangor, startling pigeons into flight from every belfry. Upon hearing the sounds, the townspeople rushed into the streets. They all stood in silence and awaited the news.
• She drove to the movies. Afterward, she went to the gas station to fill up.

References

References

1. (July 28, 2009). "The Elements of Style". W L C.